Our Home Among the Stars by Nienna
Fanwork Notes
I imagine this being sung by someone who was not personally among those who made the Great Journey, but one born soon after, well before the darkening, who is now passing on the story to a child of the next generation. It feels sort of...simplistic in its depiction of the Journey, which I think fits with the idea of it being sung to children. Our/we pronouns are used instead of they/them, because while the Elda singing wasn't personally at Cuiviénen, it is a story with which the singer's people would identify as their own.
Constructive criticism and/or comments of any kind would be greatly appreciated.
Fanwork Information
Summary: A poem/song about the stars, and the Great Journey. Terza Rima. For B2MEM 2018 using the prompt,"By the starlit mere of Cuiviénen, Water of Awakening, they rose from the sleep of Ilúvatar; and while they dwelt yet silent by Cuiviénen their eyes beheld first of all things the stars of heaven." (The Silmarillion, "Of the Coming of the Elves and the Captivity of Melkor, Tolkien.) Major Characters: Major Relationships: Genre: Poetry Challenges: B2MeM 2018 Rating: General Warnings: |
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Chapters: 1 | Word Count: 1, 360 |
Posted on 29 March 2018 | Updated on 29 March 2018 |
This fanwork is complete. |
Our Home Among the Stars
Read Our Home Among the Stars
As the Quendi awoke To the eternal stars we gazed In light and belonging; in hope
The unknown world; in yet uncounted days Was tempered by starlight Though history would traverse through innumerable ways
Their lights did pierce the unending night As the shadows grew ever more Still the stars alone shone bright
And when at last we were found; in days of yore By Oromë the Vala bold We were named the Eldar; as stars forevermore
To Aman many did go; legends unforetold Carrying the stars with them As fair Valinor was ours to behold
The stars on high; eternal light Shall carry me forever home within the unknown night!
(1) Comment by Gabriel for Our Home Among the Stars
This was lovely Nienna!
A little bit of history in song.
I imagine Maglor singing this to his little brothers. It has a definite childlike feel to it.
Thank you for sharing.
Re: (1) Comment by Gabriel for Our Home Among the Stars
I'm so glad you liked it, Gabriel! I don't think of the singer as being Maglor, but it certainly could be, how you interpret it is of course up to you. That's actually a very sweet idea, I can just picture it:) And yes, I think it is childlike, which is not necessarily a bad thing. Thank you for commenting!
(2) Comment by kimaracretak for Our Home Among the Stars
Oh gosh, this is so pretty <3