Oh, my heart was in my throat the whole time. You build the tension so well! I love the relationship between Maitimo and Findekano and also how they each see their roles as elder sons. Lovely snippet! Hope you do write more!

Well told! It is an interesting suggestion that Maitimo was planning to demand the banishment of Melkor at that meeting, and it gives gives an interesting angle that they are approaching just after Feanaro has already disrupted the meeting.
Nice contrast between the peaceful scenes in the park and the threat of violence in the street.
I also liked how you hinted at that feast of reuniting, although it won't be until much later than they think.