This is very good. You've captured a heart-breaking, tragic moment really well. Physical pain, fear, wrath, anguish, all palpable. Thanks a lot for sharing :)

Just lovely. One of my favorite lines was "a harpist's fingers, I think absently." It was a very creative way to say that Maglor is there. I also really enjoy how the piece just ends halfway through a sentence. It represents death so well. Death comes too soon yet is completely final.

Good job.