Uinen’s Revenge by oshun
Fanwork Notes
Uinen is Ossë's wife, the maia called “The Lady of the Sea.”
Fanwork Information
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Summary: Back to Middle-earth Month Challenge, Day 21 – The Prompt: Describe a big storm . . . place it in Tolkien's world. A fixed-length ficlet of 125 words (counted by MS Word). “But Uinen wept for the mariners of the Teleri; and the sea rose in wrath against the slayers, so that many of the ships were wrecked and those in them drowned.” (The Silmarillion, “The Flight of the Noldor.”)
Major Characters: Fëanor, Maedhros, Uinen Major Relationships: Challenges: B2MeM 2009 Rating: General Warnings: This fanwork belongs to the series |
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| Chapters: 1 | Word Count: 119 |
| Posted on 21 March 2009 | Updated on 21 March 2009 |
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Uinen’s Revenge
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The proud swan ship plied the unknown waters. She cut swift and true through towering swells, as though she knew not what fell and fey strangers controlled her. A vicious wind began to tear at her fair and gossamer sails, towering perilous waves to break across her deck.
The storm had arisen in an instant. Fëanáro turned, still clear-browed yet wild-eyed, his black hair clinging to his face.
”Nelyafinwë!” he roared, audible above the tempest.
”Yes, Atar.”
”Get everyone below. Secure the ship.”
”Shouldn’t you let me take the helm and go below yourself?”
Fëanáro turned upon his eldest son with a snarl. ”You claim to love these people and purport to succor them? Then do it. Or I shall find someone who will.”
Chapter End Notes
The hyperbolic language and description is used with a fond grin and nod to the countless hours of my childhood spent reading poems and stories about the sea.
(1) Comment by whitewave for Uinen’s Revenge
Fëany is such a micro-manager sometimes, but I would like to think that despite the snarky exterior, he didn't want any harm to come to his followers and that maybe he wants to have some private time alone to grieve Nerdanel (I'm a hopeless romantic, I know.) ;-)
Re: (1) Comment by whitewave for Uinen’s Revenge
I think he had a lot on his mind! Also, think he was annoyed at Maedhros for looking all down in the mouth.
(2) Comment by SurgicalSteel for Uinen’s Revenge
I liked this, it has sort of a Hornblowerish feel to it!
Re: (2) Comment by SurgicalSteel for Uinen’s Revenge
Thanks! Oh, I loved Hornblower (still do)! Read all of them.
(3) Comment by Dawn Felagund for Uinen’s Revenge
I have to agree with Surgical Steel that you have the tone of the seafaring adventure down perfectly! I'm really surprised that there are fewer stories about the crossing; it seems like a time ripe for conflict (and, therefore, fanfic! :) This one is great--so much is fit into 125 words! Well done! :)
Re: (3) Comment by Dawn Felagund for Uinen’s Revenge
Thanks, Dawn! You're terrific. The tension between Feanor and Maedhros was inspired in part by something you wrote about Losgar. Now I cannot remember which fic. I have to ask you. I tried to find it and I coudn't.
(4) Comment by Robinka for Uinen’s Revenge
And I'm wondering whether I read a piece of fanfiction just before, or maybe I was again a small girl stunned by the story of captain Ahab and the white whale. Thanks for evoking that feeling with a drabble! Very well done :D
Re: (4) Comment by Robinka for Uinen’s Revenge
I had fun with this one too! It was like I was a little girl again, curled up under a blanket on my bed with a book of sea adventures. (Of course, it has an underlying serious thread that tells something about how I view the relationship between Feanor and Maedhros at the time (Feanor = mistrustful and sarcastic and Maedhros = protective and mistrustful); but I don't necessarily expect most readers to pick up on the subtleties of that.)
(5) Comment by wind rider for Uinen’s Revenge
The piece was small but nicely written. However, I did not see Uinen's direct interaction with the characters here... Why did you put her name in the character list? I understand if that was the title, though.
LOL I have to refrain myself from going nitpicky... Hmm.
I love the first paragraph. I live in an archipelago country and love stories about the sea, however horrifying it is (okay, not so, but anyway). The word choice there was beautiful, and the personification of the ship made the picture look more vivid and the readers more immersed in the part - the predicament of the passangers aboard the stormy sea. Good job!
Re: (5) Comment by wind rider for Uinen’s Revenge
Thanks for commenting. I am glad you enjoyed it! Great name--wind rider.
I don't know why I checked Unien in the character list! I added and took the name away several times--couldn't make up by mind. I guess because Unien was the actor in the sense of causing the storm finally made me leave it. Sorry if it misled you!
Thanks again!