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Aprilertuile has requested the following types of constructive criticism on this fanwork: Characterization, Description/Imagery, Spelling, Grammar, and Mechanics. All constructive criticism must follow our diplomacy guidelines.

Awww, this is adorable! Huan deserves all the screen-time, he is best boy <3 I love how huffy he gets at being compared to a cat.

This was so fun to read!

 

(It didn't bother me or anything, but since you asked for it, there's a few tiny spelling errors I noticed:

- fourth paragraph: "cheer pleasure" instead of "sheer pleasure"

- ninth paragraph: "egg on his bag" instead of "egg on his back"

- second paragraph after the break: "sooth covered clothing" instead of "soot covered clothing")