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A near thing indeed... good thing the father could think of an excuse, but he might not be so quick the next time. I feel for this poor family torn apart in the conflict - it reminds me of the story in The Lost Road, where Herendil is young and swayed by the promises and threats and then finds out that his own father is a ringleader of the Faithful.

I didn't find it hard at all to know who you were referring to! The lack of names gave it a fairytale-like quality, which is not a bad thing at all.