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I love how you connected Finrod's foreseen doom to Bëor's mortality, because I've made the same connection myself and it made me so happy to read. I'm also really glad it has a fluffy ending, where they let themselves cast away those foreboding thoughts, because they deserve to live in the moment, while they both have time. This is beautiful, the soft touches, the sweet words, everything. I hope you write more for these two.

This is so tender and just lovely!

I love Finrod’s compassion, allowing the relationship to grow while knowing that the deeper it is the more he'll hurt when Beör's inevitable death comes.

And I really like the way Beör has the greater wisdom in this interaction, helping Finrod to be more present in the moment, without dismissing his fear of impending grief.

It's always of interest to me to consider inter mortal/immortal relationships and how they attempt to have empathy — to really feel into — each other's fates.

This is lovely to read, and some real feel-good.

This was a touching scene, you have written Finrod’s emotions beautifully. Ah, the idea that he doesn’t dare to love an immortal elf because of his dark fate looming ahead, but a mortal man - there might still be time for them.