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I'm very impressed that you managed to write something with just dialogue! For me, it's my least liked thing to write 😂

If only Arvedui had talked a bit less, and listened to the people in Forochel instead! Still, it's a very cool ficlet!

It was definitely a challenge. (But it also was a little like going back to my roots, because the first things litte chrissy wrote were just jotted down dialogue.) I usually enjoy to describe the pov-character's feelings and thoughts.

I think Arvedui is seeing the Lossoth as barbaric and unlearned and of course he knows better than them. These are his friends coming to rescue him! He should have listened better. Locals know when bad weather is coming!