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Terrific visuals--very filmic. Poor messed up Feanor. Too bad he had to take everything so hard. It's a rotten shame he couldn't have permitted his reflexive liking for and interest in Indis, instead of turning it into a forbidden act. Probably seeing his father's interest unsettled him as well.

Very well done. And it definitely conveys Indis being awesome. It worked really well for me.

Ooh, thank you so much! Yes, it's definitely a sad thing that Fëanor is taking it so hard (and being to hard on himself). And I'm thrilled that "awesome Indis" worked for you! Somehow, she always ends up being a bit of an evil stepmother, or alternatively, a saintly victim to her step-son's temper, and I wanted to let her shine (hah) for a change. They could definitely have gotten along in a less complicated constellation. I think that's part of Fëanor's inner conflict, that there are actually things about Indis that he admires and likes, but HOW DARE HE? Again, thank you for your comment!

Absolutely unforgivable, especially as she was totally aware that he was watching! ;)
(Come to think of it, Feanor will probably sooner or later convince himself that Indis must have known that Finwe would come that way and therefore contrived for him to see her practicing...)

Thanks for finding it believable!

....of Indis as a former warrior, practicing with a spear movements translated into dance, actions that kept the Vanyar alive in Cuiviénen and during the Great Journey. Her strength and beauty attract Finwë. Fëanáro at first appreciates the display, but with the contrast to his mother being so stark, and seeing his father's reaction, his thoughts turn against Indis. A beautiful story, foreshadowing future strife.