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This is really good. I like so many of your choices--that she married out of love, believing that the two of them could make positive changes, could repair divisions among their people.

I love this description of that,

"Would reconcile the old ways and the new.
Alas, he tasted of a stronger vintage."

I liked her prediction of a tsunami. I also loved that she prays for survivors who will carry the positive legacy of their people into the future.

I'm so happy to hear that you liked my choices. Tar-Míriel is dear to my heart (even though I don't write her much) so these headcanons (is that the word these days?) are quite important to me! I'm certain that - if we go with the version where she married Ar-Pharazôn for love - she wouldn't have done it out of selfishness or purely to spurn Elentir, but because she genuinely thought that it would be a step towards reconciliation. She probably got a lot of hostility from her fellow Faithful though. :(
I'm not sure she would even be able to see the behaviour of the sea from up there, depending on how high the mountain is and how thick the volcanic fumes etc. etc., but I felt I needed to allude to the wave somehow after all that talk of smoke and fire. Some say the world will end in fire, but Númenor ultimately didn't! Glad you liked that addition, and I'm glad that you liked her prayer for the survivors. Thank you for your lovely comment!

It has very little to do with the original context, I'm afraid, but somehow that's what the "merely mortal" part did with my (merely mortal! ;)) brain. Glad you liked it! I've been rather suspicious about the idea of Tar-Míriel running helplessly and fruitlessly up the mountain before the waters overtake her as it's presented in the Akallabêth for a while, so this was a welcome chance to present her in a more dignified manner - and as somebody who ascended the mountain before all hell actually broke loose. (I mean. Would you run up an erupting volcano, even to escape a tsunami? I don't think I would!)

Thank you!

I absolutely adore this poem. I have already read it at least five times and saved it as a favorite. Something about it just keeps pulling me back. First of all, the writing itself. I really appreciate the way it is interwoven with rhyme, but never feels bound to it if that makes sense. The rhymes give it a sense of flowing rhythm as they are interspersed throughout, and yet they are never forced in place of emotional power. Not that there is anything wrong with fully steady rhyme schemes of course, and they certainly can hold emotional power, but I have a special fondness  for pieces like yours where the rhymes allow it to flow, and yet you are never quite sure when you are going to get another, which adds something to the unsteadiness felt in the scene, and with it you are pulled along in the full weight of what is being said. I know I am rambling on about the same subject, so I will move on.

I am not particularly interested in Númenor, so I really wasn't expecting to like this as much as I did. Even though the characters are ones I hold little special fondness for,  nor do I know much of the depths of their stories and lore, you wrote in such a way that I felt fully for them. 

Something about this piece feels... compact, in a good way. Everything just seems to fit so perfectly into place, especially the way the prompt is inserted, so that the whole piece seems to be building up to it. 

You can see that I am rather gushing about this piece, but I truly mean everything I'm saying. Well done!

Thank you so much for your lovely, long comment! And please don't worry about gushing! I love to hear what my readers think (especially if they're so generous!).

I didn't focus on rhyme at all, merely on rhythm, so any rhyme that happened just... happened. The formal language of prayer allows for a reasonably steady rhythm, but a fixed rhyme scheme would probably have taken away the sense of urgency and insecurity, and I wanted to bring just that across. I'm glad that this has worked for you! And even more thrilled that you felt the emotional impact even though you don't have any particular emotional attachment to the characters. I'm taking it as a huge compliment! I'm also happy to hear that the poem feel compact, with everything necessary in place but no undue circumlocution, and a noticeable build-up to the final line. That was my intention, and I'm very excited if I managed to pull it off!

In conclusion, thank you so much for your thoughts!