Very nice, Dawn.  I especially like that Finwe brought fire to the people.  Very well done.

I am excited with this story--the lives of the elves in Cuivienen have always interested me and trusting your ability to flesh them out, I'm sure that this will be an interesting read.  I'm looking forward to reading more about Tata, Rumil, Ingwe and most especially Miriel and the part that Elenwe will play in all of it. 

I am intrigued with Curuni and have theories to the physical changes she is experiencing.  I liked the line "maybe she has grown bits beneath all that."   I also think that the part where Finwe lights the leaves with fire is so priceless, knowing that he will also bring forth a different kind of fire to the First-born in the future.  Looking forward to the next chapters.