The last part made me giggle. Maglor of the commanding voice! I can buy that!

I like this very much! Very  unusual Maglor.

Would you allow me to make a  Russian translation of it and upload  to  Ficbook.net ? Surely , there will be your name. and  I will send you  a link and keep  you informed about comments...

This work, aside from being very well written, is an amazing portrait of  both the characters of Fëanor and Maglor. I loved how your Kanafinwë manages to retain some softness without loosing in strength and fierceness and I'm extremely glad someone mentioned how much strength and military ability must have taken to keep Maglor's gap. 

Your depiction of Fëanor is almost perfect, I really liked it, maybe because it is very similar to how I imagine him. What I found most interesting is how you managed to depict his problems in relation to his family without making it feel forced while showing his love for his sons. 

Another thing I found extremely good is how you managed to mix Maglor's double role as an artist revered among his kind and as a commander of men. Besides I tend to like very much when a Silmarillion fanfiction shows also the perspective of "lower classes" like this one did in the second half.

Poor young Celirluin, he never stood a chance. 

Congratulations again.