Oh, I like your Sauron here -- more evil and viciously otherworldly than mine. I think of a Nosferatu type character. Those visions would be very upsetting to deal with and gave me a shiver.  I also liked your explanation of how he was caught when his army buggered off. 

I particularly like your depiction of the guards -- liked their language which sounds authentic, with the humor: 

Forsa laughed. "He can't scare me. I used to go out with his sister."

"Can you hold down the fort? I need to go drown some ants."

It was quite visual too -- I could really see what was happening. I enjoyed your take on Sauron's capture!  Cheers!