Chapter 1
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"I'm tired of melancholy.
It's so boring to stay in silence,
Staying idle would be a folly.
Would you tell me of Helcaraxë ?
Can you tell me if that was scary,
Is it true that your tears were freezing?
Tell me things that you are aware
Of that way of the dead and living.
You survived and you started over,
Even though that path was ghastly.
Tell me me please! Few could tell this story,
Would you tell me of Helcaraxë ?
Times change quickly, I tell you lastly.
As we dwell in this land remote,
Would you tell me of Helcaraxë ?"
"No. Don't even ask. I won't"
(1) Comment by Dawn Felagund for Tell me of Helcar... [Ch 1]
Oh, I like this! It has such a lovely flow and rhythm until those last lines just kind of plunk down with such a sense of finality. Nicely done! :)
Re: (1) Comment by Dawn Felagund for Tell me of Helcar... [Ch 1]
Thank you! This is a great compliment!))
(2) Comment by Elleth for Tell me of Helcaraxe [Ch 1]
And then there are those silences and refusals that speak more than a thousand words. Wonderful twist at the end, and I agree with Dawn on the flow and rhythm beforehand.
I'll be looking forward to more of your poetry, you really have a knack for this!
Re: (2) Comment by Elleth for Tell me of Helcaraxe [Ch 1]
Thank you! Honestly, it was my first experience with poetry in English, which is not my mother tongue. You are encouraging me to do more))
(3) Comment by Elleth for Tell me of Helcaraxe [Ch 1]
I'm really, really glad to hear that. :) English isn't my native language either, and I can't stress enough how much writing fanfiction helped me become comfortable using it. And poetry is even more intricate than prose, so here's mad respect for posting your poems!
(And I'm still looking forward to more from you. :))
(4) Comment by Himring for Tell me of Helcaraxe [Ch 1]
Such an interesting idea and a neat conclusion!
Re: (4) Comment by Himring for Tell me of Helcaraxe [Ch 1]
Thank you very much! I am glad you liked it)).
Author's Response:
Thank you very much! I am glad you liked it)).
(5) Comment by Robinka for Tell me of Helcaraxe [Ch 1]
Another ESL writer here clapping her hands in praise of your work :) This is wonderful, and the last line delivers a painful punch in the gut. Awesome!
Re: (5) Comment by Robinka for Tell me of Helcaraxe [Ch 1]
Thank you! ))
(6) Comment by Makalaure for Tell me of Helcaraxe [Ch 1]
Such a powerful last line. Very well done. :)
(7) Comment by Winterwitch for Tell me of Helcaraxe [Ch 1]
This is great! A well-formed and -phrased request with just the perfect answer.
(And bravo for writing poetry as a fellow ESL!)