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This is a really nice read! I loved how the color's theme recurred through the story and I found the attention put in describing which color comes from what wonderful. The style is extremely pleasant and very good at conveying emotions in additions to creating beautiful images. Despite my partiality toward the Fëanorians Noldor I feel it is refreshing and very interesting to see the great events described in the Silmarillion as they would have been lived by "common" people and you managed to show reactions to war and fear that seem very realistic, given the characters you used. I particularly liked how the voyage under Neril's command was depicted (you know you are doomed when you hope for Thingol's help.. XD). 

As for the characters they were all very vivid and each one had his/her own merits even though I cannot help but feel that Eiliniel's love for Gorlim was more of a child's love than the one she came to feel for Glóredhel since, by the time the two became a couple, Eiliniel had grown considerably and this is one of the things I liked the most, how you made her character change through the fic in a plausible way.  My only complain is that in this A.U. there will be no Brandir. XD

Congratulations again for this piece.

Thank you very much for the lovely comment! :D It's always a nice challenge to approach major events like this from minor character's points of view. And I'm so glad that Eilinel's development worked for you – childish love was exactly what I was going for with the dynamic between her and Gorlim, and it was fun trying to develop her from that point.