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Hi, I loved your story northern skies and found myself wondering as I read it about the tantalising tangients of stories not told like, what happened to Sergil after he left Imladrias? He got his come uppancecbutvwhatcwill become anbelf so far on the edges of elvis society?  Elrohirs first love in the south Ham... not sure of her name but the young woman in this piece is reminiscent of her. I love the sudden flooding of recognition that overcomes Elrohir when he sees her and I  think meeting other humans and interacting with them, even in a romantic way would go some way to right the Elves severe xenophobia against other races. Elrohir is the only elf who really had the priviledge of seeing mortals from the others perspective. He sees the good in them and their innocence and straight forward natures as opposed to the elves who have long memories and grudges. Yes you are right this story if part of Northern Skies would have stalled the story as Elrohir would not have trusted the elves after such an intervention. However, I would like to see another story explore what he sees so fascinating and charming in mortals as opposed to the elves. 

Thanks for your kind words on Northern Skies! 

What happened to Serdir? I don't have any new material written on that, but in my head he did move to the Greenwood to live a solitary life in the forest. I don't think any Elvish community would be willing to take in someone who has proven capable of what he did. 

In this story, Elrohir is just homesick and wanted to have a normal conversation with a human being while Ardil remembers three great wars against Easterlings just like Vidumavi, and he's not about to let Elrond's son come to harm on his watch. They're both being reasonable and yet not, in their own way. 

You're absolutely right that this scene would have made Elrohir bolt right away and no-one could have blamed him really. 

I have a story planned that'll explore Elrohir's love for his mortal roots, but it'll come after Gathering Dusk on the timeline. 

Thanks for commenting!

 

Author's Response:

Thanks for your kind words on Northern Skies! 

What happened to Serdir? I don't have any new material written on that, but in my head he did move to the Greenwood to live a solitary life in the forest. I don't think any Elvish community would be willing to take in someone who has proven capable of what he did. 

In this story, Elrohir is just homesick and wanted to have a normal conversation with a human being while Ardil remembers three great wars against Easterlings just like Vidumavi, and he's not about to let Elrond's son come to harm on his watch. They're both being reasonable and yet not, in their own way. 

You're absolutely right that this scene would have made Elrohir bolt right away and no-one could have blamed him really. 

I have a story planned that'll explore Elrohir's love for his mortal roots, but it'll come after Gathering Dusk on the timeline. 

Thanks for commenting!