Tritina: Sirion by sallysavestheday

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Fanwork Notes

A tritina for the October 2023 Experimental challenge, using the prompt "formal verse".

Fanwork Information

Summary:

The Sons of Fëanor descend on Sirion. Elwing rises.

Major Characters:

Major Relationships:

Genre: Poetry

Challenges: Experimental

Rating: General

Warnings:

Chapters: 1 Word Count: 89
Posted on 23 October 2023 Updated on 23 October 2023

This fanwork is a work in progress.

Tritina: Sirion

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They come on wings of fog that swallows light:

fell kings and singers, once so fair of hand,

and face, and form. And kind, as told in song,

 

to children, taking hand in tender hand,

all tears and woes to banish with a song.

Now, long grief wound round and through with light

 

steals music from them, turns awry their Song.

Blinded, rough, they chase her for the light.

She falls, evading all their grasping hands.

 

And rises -- hands no more her hands but wings; the light a song.

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Oh this is marvellous!

(I'd not heard of a tritina before and of course had to look it up.)

I really love what you've crafted here, with the evolution of their story subtly echoed by the shifted repetition. Well done!

I love how the form (and the formality) reinforce what you are saying with this. Really effective and beautiful.