Devotion by Flora-lass
Fanwork Notes
Created for the Cheesy Corn Chips challenge (as part of New Year's Resolution) - because the song title prompt 'I Will Always Love You' seems appropriate for a poem which pretty much says 'I love you' ten times in fourteen lines! Beleg, of course, is deadly serious.
This isn't really a sonnet, although it owes a lot to the form. But it definitely owes something to Elizabeth Barrett Browning's 'How do I love thee? Let me count the ways' (including the rhyming of breath and death).
Fanwork Information
Summary: Beleg loves Turin. Despite everything, because of everything, forever. Major Characters: Beleg Major Relationships: Beleg/Túrin Genre: Poetry Challenges: Cheesy Corn Chips, New Year's Resolution Rating: Creator Chooses Not to Rate Warnings: |
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Chapters: 1 | Word Count: 122 |
Posted on 14 January 2024 | Updated on 14 January 2024 |
This fanwork is complete. |
Devotion
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When first I saw you, weary from the wild
I loved you as a parent loves a child.
I loved you, though you left without a word
And would not speak the truth that should be heard.
I love your foolish stubbornness and pride
(although King Thingol should not be defied).
I love you even in bad company
I love you when you whisper ‘stay with me’.
I love you as I seek you far and wide
I love you while we're fighting side by side.
When I believe you slain, true pain I know
And as I cut your bonds, I love you so!
I say ‘I love you’ with my final breath
And I still love you, even after death.
Oh god how did this hurt so…
Oh god how did this hurt so much!?
It's such a tragic tale. I'm…
It's such a tragic tale. I'm sorry if I made it worse! :( Thank you so much for commenting.
True devotion indeed! The…
True devotion indeed!
The poem handles its theme very well.
I can see Barrett Browning's influence, certainly, but it really captures the canonical trajectory of those two.
Thank you so much! I really…
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your comment.
Very beautiful and painful …
Very beautiful and painful *sniffles* Your poem conveys Beleg's feelings so well.
Thank you so much for…
Thank you so much for reading and commenting!
Oh, my heart! I read this…
Oh, my heart! I read this poem aloud, and I think it felt even more beautiful and heartbreaking that way.
I'm so flattered that you…
I'm so flattered that you read it out loud! Thank you.
Beautiful!!
Beautiful!!
Thank you.
Thank you.
oh wow!!
Oh wow!
How do you manage to pack their whole story and all the feels into fourteen lines!!
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It was quite a challenge,…
It was quite a challenge, but I loved doing it. And deciding that it was going to be all about love really helped - but I never know quite where I'm going until I get there! Thank you so much for commenting. :)
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Lovely! This hits all the…
Lovely! This hits all the marks in their relationship, cascading to that final after death (OW!) so beautifully. Well done!
I really appreciate you…
I really appreciate you reading and commenting. :)
This is beautiful, and…
This is beautiful, and deeply poignant!
Thank you so much!
Thank you so much!
This is so beautiful!
This is so beautiful!
Thank you!
Thank you!
absolutely gorgeous, but…
absolutely gorgeous, but also ahhhhhhhhh, their relationship is so sad :(
I really appreciate your…
I really appreciate your comment, and I'm sorry for taking so long to respond. I know, it's almost unbearable!