I read this with great interest: the experimental blend of different kinds of content, those moments of absurdity, of pain, of poetic description, and some more unfamiliar subject matter. (That dance is beautiful. I looked up the plot of Devdas.)

I was reminded of La Traviata also, how there used to be plots in which protagonists could only get away with some things, so to speak, if they were also dying of TB. But I am not sure how relevant that is...

This is really dense and really gorgeous with about fifty different layers -- I'm definitely going to have to read and reread it, but I come away with an impression of paradoxical opulent despair but in despair, stubbornness?  I'm not sure I can quite get my words round the whole thing but rest assured you've got me thinking hard about Celebrían, ways to characterize her, ways to see her interacting with other characters beyond what we (don't) get in the Legendarium.  I love how much you fill her in, from a hole to a person, from an absence to a presence.  As someone existing on the line of this -- not a woman, but often perceived as one and definitely raised as one -- this definitely hits marginalization in general with a gender slant but in a way that's very recognizably, broadly queer?  I hope this makes sense, I'm babbling a little...

I loved it and will be really excited to read more!