Like the archaic style, you even managed to pull of the Shakespearean trait, which is no trifle. Can definitely see Aule there, and the atmosphere is flaming. 

The start is definitely Silmarillionesque, perfectly in character, and you bring it from there to your own story with fantastic flair, it looks plausible and feels hot. 

Thumbs up, Encairion. :D

Ahem. Somehow I completely overlooked the "lover of Fëanor" bit and how literary that could be taken. Probably not what Tolkien intended, but it sounds authentic enough!