I held my breath all the way, and hoped so hard that she'd survive, and then understood why this was the only way, and I'm crying. I cannot believe this needed much tweaking of any sort.

How was that for one fully incoherrent comment? Elanor was very real: I mourn for her.

Also - damn, so well done!

Oh look, I couldn't spell either. Do wish this site had an edit function. Ah well, it's after 2 am....

Like Keiliss, I was holding my breath - you've conveyed the intensity of the attack so well, I had to read it in a big rush before I got too scared to turn back! Poor Elanor. Poor Seregon. Poor Amrod - poor everyone, really. It's such a rotten situation, and you've illustrated perfectly how good people turn into murderers - for the wrong reasons, and for the right reasons.
So glad tht Elanor's sacrifices weren't in vain, that what she did had a real impact for the better.

I was sad that Elanor felt she had to make that final choice, but I also understood why she did.

Very emotional. So much so I could barely read it (that's praise)! You were also pushing against my deeply held prejudices which is no small thing. Beautiful story. Well written (as I expected it would be!).