Foreboding by chrissystriped

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Fanwork Information

Summary:

Círdan's ship arrives in Forochel to take Arvedui south.

Major Characters: Original Character(s), Arvedui

Major Relationships:

Genre: Experimental

Challenges: Experimental, New Year's Resolution

Rating: General

Warnings:

Chapters: 1 Word Count: 179
Posted on 20 January 2024 Updated on 20 January 2024

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Foreboding

Written for New Year's Resolution 2024 and Experimental 2023, prompt "all dialogue"

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“What is that?”

“It looks like a great monster of the sea.”

“Don’t go near it, it will eat us all!”

 

“Don’t be afraid. It is a thing built of wood. A ship that will carry me south. Back to my people.”

“It is not safe, King. The ice is stronger than things made by men. The Witch-king’s power will crush it. It will carry you down into the cold, black depth.”

“It was made by elves. Lord Círdan’s ships do not sink.”

“The elvish wights are not our friends. Don’t trust them. Let them give you food. You can stay here until spring.”

“The elves have always been our allies. If you counsel against them, you speak the words of the Enemy!”

“We are not your enemy, King. I wish you would heed my warning. I feel a cold wind coming.”

“My people need me. I have been away far to long. I thank you for all the help that you have given. Take this as a token of my friendship."


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I'm very impressed that you managed to write something with just dialogue! For me, it's my least liked thing to write 😂

If only Arvedui had talked a bit less, and listened to the people in Forochel instead! Still, it's a very cool ficlet!

It was definitely a challenge. (But it also was a little like going back to my roots, because the first things litte chrissy wrote were just jotted down dialogue.) I usually enjoy to describe the pov-character's feelings and thoughts.

I think Arvedui is seeing the Lossoth as barbaric and unlearned and of course he knows better than them. These are his friends coming to rescue him! He should have listened better. Locals know when bad weather is coming!