Seven Falls by Dawn Felagund

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Summary:

Melkor and Finwë battle in Formenos after the Darkening of Valinor. A sestina.

Major Characters: Finwë, Melkor

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Artwork Type: No artwork type listed

Genre: Poetry

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Rating: Teens

Warnings: Character Death, Violence (Moderate)

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Chapters: 1 Word Count: 368
Posted on 23 February 2009 Updated on 23 February 2009

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Seven Falls

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But Melkor also was there, and he came to the house of Fëanor, and there he slew Finwë King of the Noldor before his doors, and spilled the first blood in the Blessed Realm; for Finwë alone had not fled from the horror of the Dark.

Fall seven times.
Stand up eight.

Ah, with such vigor you pronounce my fall!
Lift your eyes and vow to drive me into dark!
You strike me low and I am slow to rise;
I let your eyes linger long on my blood.
Deep within you this delusion I plant:
Slain I may be by a faint-hearted king!

But what a noble beneficent king!
You believe that yet? Oh, so far to fall!
By fastidious workings, I did plant
In your people's hearts desire for the dark,
Feral, forgott'n lust for the taste of blood.
Dare strike me again! Laughing, I will rise.

In Fëanor's heart, already did I rise;
In Fingolfin's too, fair Noldorin king.
My name pounds in your gentle last-born's blood!
Till I am needless to fulfill your fall
(But how I want to watch your eyes go dark!)
As brother fights brother to brother supplant.

Remember how Yavanna did trees plant
That, on the horizon, made pale light rise?
See now: the horizon roils with dark!
Think you such power shall be quell'd by a king
Whose full might it takes to bring my fourth fall?
Whose bubbling breaths bring the taste of his blood?

In whom fatigue moans with each beat of his blood?
Teeth bared with joy, loosely my feet I plant,
Intentionally, let him force my fall.
Intentionally, even faster I rise!
Till certainty dims the eyes of the king;
Extinguish'd their light with hastening dark.

Our shadows strive against deepening dark
Till I fall the sixth time, slipped in his blood
And rise, laughing, to hear the curse of the king:
"No growing things can your barren hands plant.
Nothing alive from you ever will rise."
Swing, little king! I am waiting to fall!

At my seventh fall, I rise, reap the dark
From a seed fed with lies and blood. I RISE!
Plant my sword in the body of a king.


Chapter End Notes

The first quote comes from The Silmarillion, "Of the Flight of the Noldor." The second quote is a Japanese proverb and is this month's Quote of the Month. It inspired this story.

A sestina is a 12th-century poetic form used by French troubadours. Its use continues today. The sestina uses six six-line stanzas where the final word of each line repeats in a fixed form from stanza to stanza. The seventh stanza is a triad that also uses the six end-line words.


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Coming fresh off a re-read of Books IV and V in Paradise Lost (I can read Milton again and again), this wonderful poem, albeit in a different form, didn't miss a beat as my mind shifted from Lucifer to Melkor.  Really beautiful work, Dawn.  Not only does the heart of the poem beat with well-chosen words (oh, I bow to you here, yes, I do) and the captivating rhythm of the rise, but its blood also rushes with verses ablaze with the power of a dark god toying with a king soon to fall.

An extraordinary work!  Brava!

Thank you, Pandemonium! I was definitely going for that archaic feel with this; I was particularly inspired by Pound\'s Sestina: Altaforte (loathe his politics but *OME* his poetry ...) You\'re the second person in a month to praise the word choice in one of my poems; I\'m starting to get a big head! ;) And the meter ... I often feel like I fail with iambic pentameter. I don\'t yet think in iambic pentameter (I can think in iambic tetrameter, as you know! :D) but I\'m glad the rhythm worked here for you. Part of me doesn\'t think that perfect iambic pentameter would really express what I want to say anyway (and if that sounds like an excuse, maybe it is! ;)

But thank you, thank you again for reading and reviewing this. Poetry never gets reviewed very well, so I am treasuring each of your words here! :D

I'm not much of a poetry person, but I gave this a try and liked how you portrayed Melkor and Finwë's confrontation.  This line is my favorite: 

"In Fëanor's heart, already did I rise; In Fingolfin's too...My name pounds in your gentle last-born's blood!"