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Fanwork Notes

Title: Immortality
Author: Eärillë

 

Number: B15
Challenges:
1. Deep Thoughts: Immortality
2. Geography of The Silmarillion: Nargothrond

 

Summary:
Was the view on life and death different between the Firstborn and Secondborn? What did the Firstborn think of Eru’s “gift” to the Secondborn? – Deep in Nargothrond, a particular Elf was wrestling with these questions and more upon the death of his first Mannish friend.

 

Rating: G
Warnings: (canon) character death, first draft

 

Characters: Balan (Bëor), Finrod
Genres: Character Study, Friendship, Mystery
Place: Nargothrond: Finrod’s quarters
Timeline: First Age: Balan’s death
Word Count (in MS Word): 368

 

Notes: The Man was not named “Bëor” here because Bëor is rather a title, not a proper name. The author did not research deeply about the man’s direct bloodline, so she would apologise to her readers for the mistaken names of his sons. (She only knows that Belen is truly Balan’s third son.) The story is inspired by Philosopher at Large’s works, so the tone might be similar to it on some points.

Fanwork Information

Summary:

Was the view on life and death different between the Firstborn and Secondborn? What did the Firstborn think of Eru’s “gift” to the Secondborn? – Deep in Nargothrond, a particular Elf was wrestling with these questions and more upon the death of his first Mannish friend.

Major Characters: Balan, Finrod Felagund

Major Relationships:

Artwork Type: No artwork type listed

Genre: Experimental

Challenges: B2MeM 2012

Rating: General

Warnings: Character Death

Chapters: 1 Word Count: 382
Posted on 25 March 2012 Updated on 25 March 2012

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Finrod stared dumbly at the frail body lying stretched out on the bed before him, grief-stricken. Balan had been sick for some time, and it seemed that it was at last his time to leave the world – on the age of ninety. And, if the Secondborn’s impending death could affect him so much, how would the said Secondborn’s family feel? Especially after Balan had been away for so long, living with him here in Nargothrond. If he had known how brief his dear friend’s life would be, he would not have kept the Man by his side so selfishly…

 

But would he have, really? He could not deny that introducing Balan to his little realm and his people and their customs had been quite a delight, especially when the Man had decided to settle in the caves with him. He could not deny that he did not understand how mortality was a gift to Secondborn, truth be told.

 

And he could not deny that he wished he could do something to stop Balan from dying.

 

As if sensing his thoughts, the Man stirred slightly and blinked, gazing right back at him.

 

“Mourn me just a little, Lord,” he wheezed, smiling weakly. Finrod pursed his lips and looked away, hiding his welling tears from the direct view of the faithful, faithful Secondborn. He met Balan’s gaze again though, when the Man continued. “I am still here with you. Three of me, in fact.”

 

Yes, his children; but they were not Balan, still! Finrod would like to shake his friend for such an askew logic. But as it was, he uttered a choked bark caught between a sob and a laugh.

 

“I spoke truly, Sir.” The smile was still there, fading because of lack of strength and not heart – never heart. “Baran has my face. Barag has my face and built. Belen has my eyes. And we raised them to follow you, Lord.”

 

Finrod really laughed now, a pained chuckle tempered with the finally-falling tears. “It is still not you, my friend,” he admitted at last.

 

The grey eyes looking at him were compassionate. “We are immortal, Lord, truly.”

 

And then they went blank, and Balan breathed his last, still smiling.


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Ooh, this is really good! I like the ending:

"The grey eyes looking at him were compassionate. “We are immortal, Lord, truly.”

And then they went blank, and Balan breathed his last, still smiling."

I like that you don't add Finrod's reaction to that. I can't really articulate why, but it seemed like a really strong ending because it leaves you wondering, and wanting more...kind of like Finrod must be feeling, I guess.

The way you show the friendship between them is great, too. Even though he's the one dying, Balan is comforting and steadying Finrod, who in turn is trying to keep his composure for his friend's sake. It's really touching, but also a bit heart-wrenching and even kind of chilling, I think. Though, I maybe have a weird perspective...

Anyway, I really liked this story!