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Adlanth has requested the following types of constructive criticism on this fanwork: Characterization, Conflict, Description/Imagery, Fulfilled Intent, Mood/Tone, Organization/Structure, Pacing, Plot, Point of View, Research, Sensitivity Read, Setting, Spelling, Grammar, and Mechanics, Style, Worldbuilding. All constructive criticism must follow our diplomacy guidelines.

This is marvelous. What a wonderful portrait of Tuor, so wistful and so driven and so loved. And Elwing, longing to be something defined, which she is not. The connection between them, and their people, and their histories, which make and remake them in the telling. Stories and songs and memory. "The Eldar may make jewels of light undying, undimming; but the Edain pass candles from hand to hand, while the wind blows."  Lovely, lovely, lovely.

....of Tuor and life at Sirion. Gileth, an elder of the House of Bëor, tells Tuor, Elwing and Eärendil the tales of her life. She is a fantastic character. I felt your descriptions, imagery and characterisations were great, and I very much enjoyed reading this piece.