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Awww, I’m happy to see Maeglin and Celebrimbor bonding and discussing their experiences with dwarves. I also liked how Celebrimbor explained the idea how the Doors of Durin work and how the Dwarves didn’t understand that the right mindset was also needed. This makes me think that Sauron perhaps knew the password (perhaps Celebrimbor was forced to reveal it), but didn’t have the right mindset so the Dwarves were safe.

Oh, I so feel for Maeglin, the stuffy air and too-loud voices. And Celebrimbor is very sweet and yet so genuinely interested. And I think I'd prefer Dwarvish dances too.

So those glow-in-the-orc-presence blades are Maeglin's!! And the fact that the password works with a form of osawë too is simply ingenious.

(ETA: ... as is the explanation for Sauron not being able to get into Khazad-dûm, because Annatar would certainly have known the password.)

I really enjoyed so many aspects of this little rich little piece.

Thank you so much!

I'm not a fan of crowds myself, especially if I don't have anyone to talk to. Luckily for Maeglin Celebrimbor wants to talk to him 😃.

I'm pretty sure the idea that Maeglin made the glowing swords is from another fic, but I don't remember which (I'm a magpie, all the interesting things get incorporated into my own works 😅).

I doubt the dwarves would let Celebrimbor write the password on the door for everyone to see, even if it were peaceful times, if that was all that was needed and I agree that Sauron surely would have taken care to find out the password. But he's not a friend and the door knows it.