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This is such a tender moment - I don't see enough of Mahtan in fics, unless he is lurking menacingly behind Feanor. :D Lovely!

Elves live so long that they must have a lot of tiny moments like this holding them together. You painted the forest and the web so vividly. Thank you!

It smelled of rotting leaves and mushrooms.

It is such a wonderful smell, though!! This whole brief moment was beautiful <3

I liked that scene with Mahtan and Nerdanel a lot! (Is the idea that the Feanorian lamps are really Mahtan's, originally, or are these all just related types of Noldorin lamps?)

Thranduil's feelings about the tree and the spiderweb are moving and really come across to the reader.

All so good!  Melkor's contrition was definitely unexpected but such an interesting idea.  Poor Cirdan, I swear, the Valar are so maddening - you can ferry an island twice but three times is just too much!?  What!?  Oh yes, Idril!  Such foresight!  And Ecthelion *ow my heart*

Beautiful! <3

I'd like this lamp next to my bed too! I like that you brought in Aulë's thing about not being attached to his work and finding joy in giving.

I love spiders, and also find their webs so fascinating, so I'm delighted to find friendly and appreciated spiders in Mirkwood too!

Parma - oh I legit teared up.  What a beautiful gift, filling in just a little of so many holes left.

Quesse - and tears again!  Such beautiful, gentle musings.

Yanta - at last, someone who learns from others' mistakes!  *applauds*

North - no it's okay, I didn't need feels today or anything

Starlight - what a beautiful moment, though the pain is coming

Starlight Reversed - oof... yes... here it comes!

Gift - 'That ridiculous elf had paid attention.' -  LOL you are forgiven for hurting me first

Tongue - LOL

South - <3

Hook - He might well make Elves fear him, as well!!

Heart - hate it when organs begin to rebel.

Fate - oof again... I admit I am not always as forgiving of Namo as perhaps I ought to be.

Iron - oh! :'(  I love/hate how he has lost his love for the working of metal.  I love how our fics are practically mirrored here!

Alda - ouch. Its so hard to realise and repent and make up for your mistakes, only to be constantly reminded of what you did.

Númen - too-sharp teeth. I like him! Poor Círdan, he seems so innocent here, and has no idea that he'll be left behind for so long.

Unque — I feel just like Idril underground! Brave woman — and, well, I think I'd take Tuor over a dream from Ulmo any day!

Aha — very vivid! Brave, staunch, Ecthelion.

 

 

 

Mouth - Oh my o.o

Arda - Love it!  Dwarves would definitely have worked that out.  Also, the beginning put me in mind of Aughra's Great Conjunction Contraption (no idea what it was actually called) from The Dark Crystal <3 (again, very Dwarvish.  Oooh... A Dark Crystal/Silm cross-over could be interesting)

Sky - Wise Elrond!

Jaws - ahahahha!!  Yes I bet Sauron greatly appreciated those beasties! <3

Gold - So sweet!!! <3

Noldo - ho ho!!  Gil-galad/Thranduil is a delightfully rare pairing indeed! (even if only hinted at)

Torment - we really do love to torture Celebrimbor, don't we.  Poor boy -  but I love his thoughts turning to Finrod!!  Excellent reference

Vala - love this insight into Osse's brief rebellion!  I've often wanted to explore it but fear I can't manage to get my hands around it.  Fantastic!

Metal - I immediately read this as an Avar - not sure if that was your intent or not, but I love it!  

Gate - oh the pain of foreknowledge :'(

Heat - such a precious moment!  Beautiful scene with a great death of depth and obvious care between them <3

Well done on getting all the prompts!!!