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Unque - Ooh, what a feeling this gave!  So much packed into such a piece, but I love that copper reference LOL

Aha - love that unconventional approach to vengeance

Essë - That name - especially the "bearing gifts" - very Sauron-esque! O.O  Very clever, sneaking himself on

Essë nuquerna - fantastic!  

I so hope you feel inspired for more, I am so in love with this series already!

It does seem that that plan of vengeance involves what he was pretty much planning to do anyway. But intentions matter!

Even when you are guarding a ship that you committed armed robbery for, frizzy hair is not a negligible factor and an exploitable weakness.

"Spirit of waste" indeed. So much laid to waste, so much potential wasted, then and later. Sigh.