How I Wish by Dawn Felagund
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Summary: Left behind by Finrod, Amárië considers the paradox of her situation: her wish for his return and the only means by which her wish would be granted. A sonnet. Major Characters: Amarië Major Relationships: Genre: Poetry Challenges: Rating: Teens Warnings: Mature Themes, Violence (Mild) This fanwork belongs to the series |
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Chapters: 1 | Word Count: 122 |
Posted on 31 December 2009 | Updated on 31 December 2009 |
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How I Wish
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How I wish--I wish--
No, I cannot say.
For what fate would I impart to thee
If my eyes lift to find thy face this day,
A sudden star caught by the darkened sea?
How I wish--I wish--
In the market square,
While my thoughts linger in a darker place,
Where I would speed thee from the shadows there
As the sun washes sorrow from thy face.
Would I know the cold reek of dungeons deep?
Would I know all that thou has suffered there?
And, bound by searing ice at hands and feet,
How much would ask that thou heed my prayer?
For my wish means that thou has hurt, has bled,
Has from agony to me dying fled.
(1) Comment by pandemonium_213 for How I Wish
Oh, this is lovely, Dawn! I bow to your ability to capture such emotional turmoil in a short sonnet. Every word, every phrase makes that happen. The meter is excellent!
Re: (1) Comment by pandemonium_213 for How I Wish
Thank you, Pandë! :) I wrote this one a bit differently in that, instead of churning it out in one sitting, I wrote it in bits over the course of about three weeks. I think that worked well. I\'m so relieved to hear that the meter worked for you; I am quite good at thinking in iambic tetrameter but iambic pentameter usually still gives me a run for my money!
(2) Comment by Beatrisu for How I Wish
Amazing! I love how you captured her sorrow, her longing, and her love for Finrod in those few lines. Brilliant!
Re: (2) Comment by Beatrisu for How I Wish
Thank you, Beatrisu! I\'m glad that you enjoyed the poem; I\'m still new at this whole poetry thing and so still get a bit of stage fright whenever I share a new poem. :)
(3) Comment by Araloth the Random for How I Wish
Wow. . .I really admire anyone who can write good poetry, especially sonnet form! Did you aim for a Petrarchan style? The portrayal of Amarie's sorrow is very nicely done. :)
Re: (3) Comment by Araloth the Random for How I Wish
Thank you, Araloth! :) Sonnets are hard for me (I can write a sestina in my sleep) because I\'m not particularly good at iambic pentameter or strong meter in general. But I won\'t ever be any good at those unless I practice, so here you go! :)
Subject-wise, yes, I was definitely inspired by the traditional notion of the sonnet as a love poem; as soon as Amarie started speaking to me about this subject, then I knew it had to be a sonnet! Rhyme-wise, I prefer Sir Thomas Wyatt the Elder\'s rhyme scheme to Petrarch\'s, so I used that here.
Thank you again for taking the time to read the poem and let me know what you thought of it--I really appreciate it! :)
(4) Comment by Ithilwen for How I Wish
Lovely, Dawn. I love how this moves from a bright, innocent hope to the guilty knowledge of the last two lines, where Amarie acknowledges the reality of what her wish for reunion would entail of Finrod.
Re: (4) Comment by Ithilwen for How I Wish
Thank you, Ithilwen! I don\'t envy the poor woman; no matter what, her choice is unhappy and a bit selfish. Oh, for those doom-filled Noldor! :)