They Went in Haste by Dawn Felagund
Fanwork Notes
From time to time, we get together on the SWG Discord and instradrabble: write impromptu short-shorts using a four-word prompt. I am collecting my drabbles here: each exactly 100 words.
Fanwork Information
Summary: A collection of drabbles written for instadrabbling sessions on the SWG Discord. Major Characters: Caranthir, Celegorm, Daeron, Fëanor, Fingon, Maedhros, Pengolodh, Voronwë Major Relationships: Genre: Fixed-Length Ficlet Challenges: Rating: Creator Chooses Not to Rate Warnings: Creator Chooses Not to Warn This fanwork belongs to the series |
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Chapters: 9 | Word Count: 887 |
Posted on 18 November 2018 | Updated on 18 November 2018 |
This fanwork is a work in progress. |
Strong
Prompt: borne, fled, forest, strong
Celegorm ruins a project in his father's forge and flees to the forest.
Read Strong
Tyelkormo fled into the forest, feet pounding past the path, until his heart felt it might burst and the tears dried on his face.
Strong Finwë! Laughable!
His body was hale and whole; it was the project he’d ruined, time devoured as he stared out the window and the blade he was softening melted—infinitely worse.
Oaks—strong, upright like his father, taking more than their share of sky—flashed past as he ran.
He did not stop till he reached the river where the willows bowed, borne on the wind to grace the water, with a strange supple strength.
Melt
Prompt: fragrant, bustle, refuse, hasten
Carnistir doesn't get ready for a dance with his future wife Taryindë.
Read Melt
Carnistir sat, pointedly not participating in bustling commotion of his brother and cousins readying for the dance. Nerdanel insisted that Carnistir go because Taryindë was visiting and needed an escort.
(Of course. When he’d last seen her, there’d been browned blood on her face from the rabbit she’d skinned for the hideous fur cloak she was making.)
Tyelkormo dabbed on some reeking perfume, proclaiming to a giggling Aikanáro that “maids would melt into his arms.”
Carnistir sniffed and refused the bottle when proffered.
But when they departed in a fragrant clamor, hastened to touch just a finger to the stopper.
Newborn
Prompt: heart, stroke, encounter, fire
Fëanor makes the first Silmaril.
(The last instadrabbling session, I tackled this same topic, earlier in the sequence but very different in tone: Fëa. I am considering that I should do a Feanor-makes-the-Silmarils every time I instadrabble! XD)
Read Newborn
Each stroke of the hammer quavered soft as withheld breath, matching the rhythm of his blood. The silima came into slow shape. Beyond the window, the Trees gilded, then silvered—again, again, again—his ribs rose from wasting flesh like newformed lands, hunger and exhaustion and time unfelt.
The Light cowered, dim, against the ventricle of the stone, clear as the dreams of Ulmo before Moringotto sullied the waters.
When he finally spoke, his voice was roughened by disuse but redolent with a father’s love at first encounter with a new child. The heart of the stone flared to fire.
Break
Prompt: clash, wind, rough, dim
Voronwë and his crew almost reached Valinor.
Read Break
“Ther’s no reef! I am certain o’it!”
Voronwë managed to choke seawater onto the deck before the next wave of frigid spray, borne on wind that broke like a fist across his face, assailed him.
“The waves, th’break on something!”
Terror and doubt, livid in the eyes of his crew. The sea clashed against something unseen, the way they might uprise against a reef just below the surface, but Voronwë had been over the side—there was nothing—
Yet there is.
The rain parted briefly, revealing a light upon a tower, dim as forgiveness withheld, still.
“Turn about!” he roared.
North
Prompt: bleak, snow, scurry, breath
Fingon visits Maedhros during the first snowstorm after the Battle of Sudden Flame. Implied Maedhros/Fingon.
Read North
A bleak rampart resolved briefly from the whirling snow. I turned to the north, turned to you.
The snow closed again upon the rampart—you—but I pushed into it until I reached your ice-stiffened furs. You stared across the Anfauglith at scurrying eddies of snow, watching for an intimation of movement, of flame, upon the towers to the north.
Your hands clutched the stone, were iced there, cracked when I broke one free. Eyes once bright as Telperion, now silver like ice, kept their watch. I blew warmth into your hand with my breath.
The fingers softened. A little.
Martyr
Prompt: star, martyr, box, sunset
Maedhros remembers his last interaction with his brothers before his captivity.
Read Martyr
“I won’t see him made a martyr.”
His brothers’ complaints trampled each other but the words Valar and abandon jabbed from the fray. But Maitimo—still then Maitimo—raised his hand.
“No. This was his choice, to come alone. This price … his loss … he was willing to pay.”
Curufinwë—hands ash-grimed from trying to gather their father into a box—glared but was still trained then into obedient silence.
But when Maitimo watched the first bloodied sunset from Thangorodrim, one that whelmed the stars, he regretted that the last look his brothers cast upon him was in hatred.
Cirth
Prompt: binomial, chocolate, world, tree
Pengolodh sneaks off to hear Daeron speak of how he won the Cirth. With a nod to one of my favorite tales from Norse mythology.
Read Cirth
Pengolodh waited until his tutor nodded off—nails set in palms, barely awake himself—and abandoned binomials and stoichiometry for the starlit beach.
A crescent of eager listeners crowded the Doriathrim scribe’s knees, a priceless gift of chocolate from Aman forsaken so he could sketch his stories in the air. Behind him, even the sea seemed to lie down and listen.
Pengolodh lingered beyond the lanternlight.
“Upon the world-tree, for nine nights I hung, my dripping blood upon the stone my price and …”
Producing a stone, wounded by his words, a tale even the sea would struggle to efface.
Erosion
Prompt: river, book, scar, hollow
Maedhros mourns the effects of centuries of war. Implied Maedhros/Fingon.
Read Erosion
What is a river but a scar?
Findekáno knew, more than the scars of his captivity, Maitimo mourned the slow hollowing of his body by time: the furrow in his brow, the slump of his shoulders.
A sheet drawn close until the last candle was snuffed.
What are mountains but assaults of the gods?
A limp he sought to hide, the way his eyes flinched at loud sounds.
A mind wandering from the book in his lap.
What are stones if not worn to dust?
His anger less at Moringotto than at the grinding time set upon him by Ilúvatar.
Roots
Prompt: seedling, last, rekindle, shadow
For Anairë, after the Darkening, much has changed, yet some things remain the same.
Read Roots
Anairë would never grow used to the way the new Sun made the shadows long at the end of the day. She’d never grow used to the way it westered and burned her eyes on the road back from Alqualondë.
She’d never stop missing the touch of her children’s minds, lost over the sea.
She tucked in the last seedling in orchard row and rose, wiping her brow. Growing things still reached for light and roots still held fast.
Eärwen came to stand beside her, chin on her shoulder, earth-grimed hand squeezing her own.
Many things could rekindle, in the light.
(1) Comment by Himring for They Went in Haste [Ch 5]
I enjoyed this sheaf of drabbles!
Re: (1) Comment by Himring for They Went in Haste [Ch 5]
Thank you! I'm glad you could make it over later! :D
(2) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 1]
And you are! Hurray. Just stalking you my dear, and looking for anything you have written recently. Lovely writing.
Re: (2) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 1]
Thank you! I enjoy instadrabbling; it's one way to force me to write during the school year! :D
(3) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 2]
I love your Carnistir and the very gorgeous Tarylindë.
(4) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 3]
This is very beautiful- such a visual image you have created, such a sense of ternderness and creation.
(5) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 5]
This is very tender and beautiful. In it, you say everything there is to say. I wish you would write a longer Findekamo/Maitimo- a sequel to AMC where they start to realise what there is between them. My dream come true that would be.
(6) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 6]
I don't quite know how you do this- make such a short scene so utterly complete. So much in this; the refusal to allow them to make Feanor a martyr (and it never occured to me before that they would try! Curufinwe's hands- that focus on their grime, their depserate scrbbling to save dust, is terribly poignant- and the heavy heavy irony of Maitimo (still) is so weighted. Brilliant.
(7) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 7]
This creates a wonderful image of darkness and a voice speaking out of it- the Odon myth is really interesting here. (and of course, the Christ myth too) An ordeal that yields gifts, not only th story but the voice too. I like the idea that Pengolodh is outside the lamplight.
(8) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 8]
Oh, this is a grim and sorrowful tale- but I think it is how Tolkien saw things too. Maedhros is the most tragic of all his characters I think and then slow grinding of his spirit the worse thing Tolkien inflivts upon him. Fingon's death seems to finish him and only the Oath keeps him alove.
(9) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 1]
This reminds me of the scene in AMC where he sees the squirrel and is distratced by its distress - I like the analogy of the trees -the oaks taking u more than their share of the sky, like their father, and the willows that bow with supple grace.
(10) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 2]
I really like your Taryindë and her seeming clumsy mannishness- perfect for Carnistir who is also strange and doesn't quite fit in.
(11) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 3]
LOve this idea of the Silmaril as a heart.
(12) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 4]
Great sense of the storm in this- the sea, senses, feeling overwhlemed and in terrible danger. I think back to him as he was in ANC- I have never bothered to find out anything about him before but just looked him up -power of your writing, Dawn.
(13) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 5]
And this moment is perfect- like a painting that catched perfectly the snes of the cold, the ice, the biting wind- and the love between them.
I blew warmth into your hand with my breath.
The fingers softened. A little.
Perfect and beautiful.
(14) Comment by ziggy for They Went in Haste [Ch 6]
There is a terrible bitterness and fury and grief in this one line:Curufinwë—hands ash-grimed from trying to gather their father into a box.
And of course the irony, although I am sure he knew this only too well when he choose to go and sortie with Morgoth, that maitimo went too - his choice, his price, his loss. He was willing to pay.
That ending. That perfect…
Edit: my computer had a fart, so the right comment is the second one I just posted.
Martyr is hands down my…
Martyr is hands down my favourite. It'd make a beautiful poem.